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Nowadays, many people prefer to seek medical advice on the Internet instead of seeing a qualified doctor. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative development?

#people #advice #internet #doctor #development
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With
soaring
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the soaring
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 development of
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information
informantion
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information
 technology, the
internet
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 plays an important role in our daily lives.
As a result
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, some people prefer to search for medical advice online, while
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others
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 believe it is unhelpful to gain
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 information on the
internet
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. In my opinion, providing
general
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 public with trustworthy medical
suggestion
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 online will be beneficial to improve the quilty of the whole medical care system. On the one hand, it is
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true
sure
ture
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true
 that there are
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plenty of online platforms that provide medical advice,
most
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but most
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 of them are not written by professional doctors.
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 there are high
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possibility
posibility
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possibility
 of spreading
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misleading
mis-leading
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misleading
 information. And if a patient
receive
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the
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incorrect information and follow the
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wrong
worng
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wrong
 treatment, it would bring some side effects or even escalate the problem.
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, removing a
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wart
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might lead
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serious infection, excessive bleeding and
another
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 medical emergency. When problems like these happened, no one could
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 accountable for the risks but the
patients
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 themselves.
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, owning to the
internet
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, the public is well aware of
most
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the most
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 common medical disorders and preventive measures. A rational and prudent individual should have the ability to decide whether to get
professional
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a professional
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diagnosis
diagosis
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diagnosis
 in
hospital
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a hospital
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 or handle it at home. And if
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patients
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 with wild diseases could solve it by themselves
instead
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 of going to
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the hospital
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, it would reduce the workload of doctors so that doctors can help other
patients
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 real needs.
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, if
patients
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 have some basic knowledge of their current situation, which will have them make better decisions.
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, when it comes to choosing the best
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hospital
hopital
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hospital
 and doctor to give them the most effective treatment. In conclusion, I believe it is positive for the whole healthcare development if the
patients
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 can receive
reseaonable
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reasonable
 and useful medical advice
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internet
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