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The best way to solve the environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The significant rise in
pollution
 and global warming is endangering human existence.
consequently
, in an attempt to mitigate
this
 phenomenon, some considered that raising the price of
fuel
 is the ultimate solution. While I agree that
this
 action might have positive influences, I believe that raising awareness has a major role as well. To start,
fuel
, as it is considered the leading cause of air
pollution
,
thus
 limiting its use, is considered the leading cause of air
pollution
,
thus
 limiting its use would have an essential impact on saving the environment. Eventually,
fuel
 is used in factories which in turn leads to the emission of carbon dioxide and release of pollutants to the atmosphere,
however
 as its price increase, these factories have to look for alternatives that might be affordable and friendly to the surrounding nature.
In addition
, people will use public transportation or electrical cars
instead
 of
fuel
 ones and over years
this
 minor change in habits can decrease the rate of
pollution
 by more than 50%. on the other side, despite all the actions taken, without raising awareness and modifying citizens' lifestyles the earth would remain endangered. Having an educated community is the key to saving the world.
For instance
, encouraging people to buy electrical cars and recycling are some of the measures that can limit
pollution
. In fact, having an educated community is the key to saving the world from the threatening troubles surrounding us. in conclusion,
although
 increasing
fuel
 costs can aid in saving the earth ,
however
, raising awareness through campaigns and conferences toward ultimate actions is the major key to decreasing
pollution
.
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