Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
It is believed that all
experience
that people
have in their childhood has a big imprint on their adult life
. But some people
believe that Correct article usage
the pre-school
pre-school
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preschool
experience
is the most influential one,others
reckon that teenage experiences at school are more important.Correct word choice
while others
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essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter.
Many people
claims
that what pre-schoolers go through plays a crucial role in their adult Change the verb form
claim
life
. People
putting importance on childhood claim that in such
time children
gain basic necessary skills and how well the child will be taught basic skills depends
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ondepends
further
development of the child in all areas of life
. Correct article usage
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Lates
poll Correct your spelling
Latest
of
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by
famous
psychiatrist Correct article usage
a famous
Jersey
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in Jersey
demonstrate
that kids who simultaneously attended kindergarten regularly and were trained by their parents at home, achieve better results at school, than Change the verb form
demonstrates
children
without proper attention. Subsequently
, pre-school
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preschool
experience
takes an important place in children
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children's
life
. But in general pre-school
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preschool
experience
gives only half of necessary
skills,so that’s why it Correct article usage
the necessary
remain
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remains
controversial
statement.
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a controversial
However
, a lot of people
reckon that teen experience
have a bigger influence on Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
children
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children's
life
. And it is proven by a well-known psychologist from the USA, Rayon,who believe
that detailed studying of each patient’s teenage Correct subject-verb agreement
believes
years
always helped him in revealing weak points. He is reckon
that Change the verb form
reckons
during
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apply
all
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the
teenager
period forms human personality and that’s why all developments that occur Replace the word
teenage
with
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in
person
during Add an article
the person
a person
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the teenagers
teenagers
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teenage
years
can extremely influence on
their future Change preposition
apply
life
.
From my point of view , referring to the words of the famous psychologist Rayon , it is clearly seen that teen
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the teen
years
plays
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play
pivotal
role in forming personality. It should be mentioned that my opinion Add an article
a pivotal
also
based on statistics showing that Add a missing verb
is also
near
88 Change the word
nearly
percentage
of Replace the word
per cent
population
received different psychological trauma and disorders during Add an article
the population
teen
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their teen
years
.
To summarise, both views on this
topic are accepted , but above all , teen
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the teen
experience
can be more traumatic and memorable that
gives Correct pronoun usage
which
right
to claim that it is more influential. More important Correct article usage
the right
be
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being
mentally
healthy person than having better results in school.Add an article
a mentally
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