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Everyone deserves to be educated. It is unfair that intelligent people are not admitted to private universities because of their financial background. University education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessa

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The given bar graph illustrates the worldwide profit-making of cell phone brands from 2009 to 2013. It is clearly evident that the production of ZTE company was higher in 2013 on as seen in the other two years.
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, considering the LG brand there was high vending in 2009 and it started falling in the other years.Moving to the Nokia corporation, sales were high in the year 2009 and there was a steep decline in the trade which fell to 250 in 2013 and 420 in 2011.Turning to, Apple which is the costliest mobile brand in today's world has seen a spike in 2013 of 150% from40% in 2009 and 150% in 2011. Moving on, the sales of Samsung are far higher every year on comparing with other companies.The highest production was in the year 2013 which is about 450 and 240 to 300 in the span from 2009 to 2011. Overall, the result of the given chart picturises the sales of different companies and gives the information that most the folks purchased Samsung mobile phones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access to education
  • Financial constraints
  • Fundamental human right
  • Socioeconomic gap
  • Educational attainment
  • Global economy competitiveness
  • Excessive student debt
  • Equal opportunities
  • Investment in the future
  • Specialized programs
  • Viable
  • Free education system
  • Perceived value
  • Higher education
  • Overqualification
  • Job market
  • Underfunded universities
  • Quality of education
  • Tuition fees
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