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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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There is no denying that using of
the
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social networks especially,
Facebook
 has increased by
year
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the year
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. For
this
 reason, many
people
 claim that social
media
sites
 cause several negative situations not only personally but
also
community
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the community
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.
Although
such
sites
 are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on local societies.
To begin
 with, thanks to social
media
,
people
 have many advantages.
For example
, countless
people
 who live in different countries can have a chance to contact others.
Moreover
, after contacting, jobs can be found effortlessly because of the extensive network.
In addition
, several social groups can be created by the person in order to discuss and share their common interest.
Therefore
,
people
 can find solutions to their problems, thanks to
Facebook
 groups.
On the other hand
, the effect that
Facebook
 and other social
media
 networking
sites
 have had on societies and local communities can only be seen as negative. Unexperienced
people
 who do not know to use effectively
Facebook
 can be taken to the cleaners by swindlers.
This
 situation damages not only individuals but
also
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a victim has family, they can be affected.
Furthermore
, most
people
 started to be addicted in order to find new friends. Until they meet someone, they waste their hours. In conclusion, even though online social
media
sites
 have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same effect on society or local communities. In
this
 way,
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 should not spend their time on
Facebook
 as much as possible because of above the negative reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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