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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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It is believed that all
experience
 that
people
 have in their childhood has a big imprint on their adult
life
. But some
people
 believe that
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the pre-school
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pre-school
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preschool
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experience
 is the most influential one,while others reckon that teenage experiences at school are more important.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. Many
people
 claim that what pre-schoolers go through plays a crucial role in their adult
life
.
People
 putting importance on childhood claim that in
such
 time
children
 gain basic necessary skills and how well the child will be taught basic skills
depends
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further
 development of the child in all areas of
life
.
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Lates
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Latest
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 poll
of
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famous
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 psychiatrist
Jersey
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demonstrate
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 that kids who simultaneously attended kindergarten regularly and were trained by their parents at home, achieve better results at school, than
children
 without proper attention.
Subsequently
,
pre-school
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preschool
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experience
 takes an important place in
children
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children's
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life
. But in general
pre-school
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preschool
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experience
 gives only half of
necessary
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 skills,so that’s why it
remain
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controversial
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 statement.
However
 , a lot of
people
 reckon that teen
experience
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experiences
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 have a bigger influence on
children
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children's
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life
. And it is proven by a well-known psychologist from the USA, Rayon,who
believe
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 that detailed studying of each patient’s teenage
years
 always helped him in revealing weak points. He
is reckon
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 that
during
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all
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the
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teenager
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teenage
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 period forms human personality and that’s why all developments that occur
with
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in
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person
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the person
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 during
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the teenagers
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teenagers
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teenage
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years
 can extremely influence
on
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apply
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their future
life
. From my point of view , referring to the words of the famous psychologist Rayon , it is clearly seen that
teen
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the teen
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years
plays
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play
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pivotal
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 role in forming personality. It should be mentioned that my opinion
also
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is also
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 based on statistics showing that
near
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 88
percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 received different psychological trauma and disorders during
teen
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their teen
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years
. To summarise, both views on
this
 topic are accepted , but above all ,
teen
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the teen
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experience
 can be more traumatic and memorable
that
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 gives
right
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 to claim that it is more influential. More important
be
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mentally
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a mentally
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 healthy person than having better results in school.
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