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Human activities have led negative effects on plants and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Extinction of different types of fauna and flora is often considered
as
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the most urgent environmental
problems
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 that we have to deal with nowadays.
Although
, some could disagree because there are more pressing things. I totally agree that the extinction of
species
 is a very serious problem, but
also
 I believe that global warming is a more crucial situation that we have to deal with. On one hand, the disappearance of some
species
 has been increasing over the years
as a result
from
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 human activities,
such
 as deforestation or
also
 illegal hunting.
This
 is a big problem for some countries because these
species
 have a cultural significance.
Moreover
, the disappearance of
species
 will
be follow
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 by the loss of biodiversity and ecosystems.
On the other hand
, I have been reading and listening
about
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this
 problem. Recently, global warming,
for example
,
which
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is described by increasing amounts of carbon monoxide in the atmosphere and the result, will be an increase in temperature and sea levels. Pollution is
also
 increasing and is one of the biggest problems around the world because
the
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poor air quality has harmful effects on human health, particularly in the respiratory system and cardiovascular
system
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.
Also
, can be damaging plants and animals like us. To sum up, I totally agree that the extinction of
species
 must be prioritized.
However
, the experts believe
that is
 most important the temperature and sea levels.
Furthermore
, humans, we have to save the environment and help them to have more control
about
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 it,
otherwise
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 it will be even worse.
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