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Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?

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It is undeniable that the question of whether
students
 should specialize or get a wide range of knowledge remains a source of controversy in different
education
 systems across the world. While both the former and the latter have positive aspects, I firmly believe that
school
students
 should obtain a broad
education
. On the one hand, if
students
 concentrate on particular
subjects
 at the
age
 of 15,
then
 they will be able to cover a lot of ground in those subject areas.
For instance
, if
students
 at
this
age
 study only mathematics and sciences, they will be able to spend all of their
school
 days on these lessons. They will not have any distractions from studying languages or arts. Young
students
 will have a good grasp of their chosen fields of study and will
therefore
 be well-equipped to put the knowledge that they have acquired into practice.
This
 system
thus
 provides
students
 with good preparation before they pursue their speciality in higher
education
 or improves their job prospects when they leave
school
.
On the other hand
, I favour a system in which pupils study a wide variety of disciplines throughout their years at
school
. I would argue that achieving a comprehensive
education
 is one of the milestones in life.
That is
 to say, the abilities of
students
 to integrate cognitive, psychomotor and behavioural domains through a process of broad learning in all aspects of life. Take
such
subjects
 as literature, philosophy, and history as examples. Schools must encourage their youngsters beyond the
age
 of 15 to be interested in these
subjects
.
Furthermore
, by learning a different range of
subjects
,
students
 have a chance to work on other necessary social skills, develop critical and analytical thinking, and are incentive to be creative. In conclusion,
although
 at the
age
 of 15
students
 may be better prepared for work by focusing on only a few
subjects
, studying a wide range of
subjects
 prepares them for life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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