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Some employers are willing to give their workers a certain amount of unpaid sabbatical time, believing this benefits the individual and the organisation. Other employers see no merit in this arrangement and discourage it. Consider the possible arguments for and against unpaid sabbatical leave, and reach a viewpoint of your own.

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It is a controversial topic if employees in any company decide to spend unpaid overtime thinking it could enhance their skills and push the organization forward. Or to leave
work
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 place on
time
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 and get paid for any overtime they do. I do support the point of view which is
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 matter should be up to
employee's
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the employee's
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 situation and
generally
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 they should stay for
unpaid
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an unpaid
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 sabbatical
time
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 if they could. On one hand, those who argue that there is no advantage in working sabbatical
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 for free, say that workers have many other
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responsibilities
responsabilities
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responsibilities
 in their life,
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 as taking care of their families or spending more
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 with friends.
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, they should not stay over their duties
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.
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, in
Egypt
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 the vast majority of people prefer to visit their relatives
those
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apply
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who live in small villages out of the
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capital
capitial
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capital
 after they are getting done with
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their
thier
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their
work
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 responsibilities.
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result
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 they try as much as they can to get their job done even before the
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.
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, staying a certain amount of unpaid sabbatical
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 gives many benefits for
company
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the company
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 and individual, when it comes to the
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employees
emlpoyees
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employees
, for sure they gain much more training and adaptation
with
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work
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the work
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 environment.
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,
the
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fresh graduates who need to learn more about their new
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-life should take
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 suggestion into account. If they want to be qualified and get more experience in a short
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, they would spend
the
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most of
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their
the
thier
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their
day
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daytime
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time
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 at
work
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.
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 the value
not
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is not
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 only in money but
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 in learning. In conclusion,
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 topic has both sides negative and positive and
every one
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this
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 by his point of view
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