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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People’s opinions differ as
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higher remuneration is a vital element when selecting
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, many argue that job satisfaction should be the most significant
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 to choose a career path. Personally, I strongly agree with the latter viewpoint and
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 essay will extensively explain the reasons to support my opinion based on real-life examples.
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 with, in most cases, all well-paid careers are
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 demanding, to illustrate with an example, jibs in
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 and investment banking industry, inherently expect
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 to put in a minimum of 80-hour workweeks,
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, those
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 lose control of their work-life balance, and are too exhausted by the end
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 the week, to spend all the money they earned.
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,
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 devastating lifestyle leads to
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numerous health
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 in a long run. In a marked contrast, choosing a career which gives you
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significant
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job satisfaction
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 proves to be a better choice in making a person happy.
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, a working environment where one’s ideas are truly appreciated,
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 ensures that
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 a deep sense of contribution.
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, leading to increased levels of satisfaction. One recent survey of 1000 legal mid-level executives indicated that the characteristics of a work-life balance
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 ranked much higher than the compensation.
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, having spent a good day at work,
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 can spend quality time with their beloved ones or
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 a hobby. In a nutshell, I absolutely agree that considering money in choosing a career or job should not be a prior reason. Individuals need to weigh the pros and cons of other factors as well and take a
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 decision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • passion
  • quality of life
  • work-life balance
  • career advancement
  • societal impact
  • income disparity
  • material success
  • monetary compensation
  • wealth accumulation
  • economic well-being
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