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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Nowadays, there is
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rapid growth for
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 to find
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 chance by choosing themselves to be their bosses. In my view, there are several reasons for us to be self-employed. There are two main reasons why workers prefer to construct a
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 by themselves.
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, the improvement of education plays an important role, and students learn more useful skills applied to their work. It means that more people have the ability to manage themselves and even their companies.
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 of expertise skills they learned in university make it come true.
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,
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 nowadays are growing, which means a
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 controls its
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 more. It means that people need to face more rules than before and have more working hours facing
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, there are
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 some drawbacks for ones of being self-employed. The main disadvantage is the revenue of maybe decrease. In many countries, they have some rules to protect their companies which owe to the countries. So it is harder for one person who
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 with them. Another drawback is the effectiveness to work in a
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, which means it is simple to do the assignment only. If a person ought to construct a
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, he or she
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 to find the chance and spend more time employing workers. It is harder and time-wasted most of
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times
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 due to the terrible economical situations in current times. In conclusion, while there are some reasons to believe people prefer to have their own
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, my opinion is that working in
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 organisation
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 a better choice to gain money and improve ourselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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