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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#consideration #career #job #income
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 current scenario, often it can be seen that people opting
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payment
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however
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 I firmly believe that
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 satisfaction is prior than anything else.so I totally disagree
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 I will show my opinion by providing my own experience.
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 or
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 is a part of an individual's
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. It has a strong connection with
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.so it will reflect in their
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 directly .if the
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 or surrounding is not good enough to provide mental relief it will
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 an adverse effect on that
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 .because emotions are connected to each other.
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 amount of money they can pay
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you ,but the satisfaction might not be there, I was working in
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 with high
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payment
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,beginning of the period I enjoyed working there only because of the
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 what I am going to
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receive
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 the end of month .but it didn't
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 , after few months itself I realize that I was wrong .as the people treated me there not as their colleague but as a
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 .they were ordering me to do each
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 everything even the which is not in my area
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 is directly related to a person's
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 and it will
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effect
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mentally
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 and physically if the employee is not satisfied with his /her job . And it may
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effect
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rest
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 of
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day
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 .so job satisfaction is always
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 than the
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • passion
  • quality of life
  • work-life balance
  • career advancement
  • societal impact
  • income disparity
  • material success
  • monetary compensation
  • wealth accumulation
  • economic well-being
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