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Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?

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Technology over years has influenced various facets of life and learning for
children
 is no exception. While some
children
 have better learning by watching
TV
 ,whether or not
children
 should watch
TV
 regularly
both
 in school and at home is a contentious issue.The situation has
both
 its merits and demerits.In the following paragraphs advantages and disadvantages will be discussed followed by my personal viewpoint It has been scientifically proven that audio-visual senses develop in
children
 earlier than reading and comprehension skills.
Therefore
 when
children
 are given an opportunity to utilize
television
 for their learning which is a great source of audio-visual learning they tend to be more attentive and find the whole experience very intriguing .
Hence
 it is no surprise that parents around the globe are subscribing to
television
 channels for child learning . But in my ,opinion students should not be allowed to watch
TV
 regularly
both
 in school and at home because the disadvantages that one has outweighed the advantages offered by the same.
To begin
 with,
Children
 tend to sit in front of the
television
 like couch potatoes and don't indulge in physical activities. These lead to a long-term detrimental effect on their health and hinder the overall
development
 of
children
 . ,
Secondly
, long screen time affects the eyes of
children
 adversely and results in poor eyesight and several eye issues in
children
.
Thirdly
 because of spending excessive time in front of the
television
children
 have slow
development
 of essential skills
such
 as reading and comprehension .They
also
 become anti-social and
therefore
 cannot develop their overall personality . To hammer the
last
 nail I would like to say that a few hours of
TV
 time could benefit
children
 but regular watching of
TV
both
 in school and at home should be avoided as it adversely affects a child's
development
 .Other interesting methods of learning like enjoying nature, and having group studies should be encouraged for the overall
development
 of the child.
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