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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in
regards
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 to the issue I am facing with my
room
 and I
also
 want you to allocate me another staying arrangement. I am
student
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a student
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of
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in
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 final year, currently staying in my accommodation
of
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in
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university
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the university
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 east building on
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the 2nd
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2nd floor
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room
 number 5. For your information at present, I am sharing my
room
 with one of the students of
same
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 college who is pursuing arts and culture as his subject and I am into information technology. Since we belong to two different
field
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, I am not able to focus on my
final year
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 projects which I have to submit to the University.
Moreover
, the main reason for me to write
this
 letter is to notify
that
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 due
his
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 course demand, he keeps playing music and
practice
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 various
kind
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 of performing arts which has been a problematic issue to focus
me
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on my studies and concentrate on projects.
Therefore
, I would request you to arrange
me
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 a different
room
 as per my requirement probably a single sharing
room
 so I can completely concentrate on my graduation year preparation.
Also
, let me know about the procedure for changing and fees if any. Hope you will do the needful as early as you can. Thanking You! In anticipation. Yours sincerely Afroz
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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