Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but there is no agreement about whether it is the government’s responsibility. What is your opinion?

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There are controversial perspectives heating up a debate over whether the government should make a
payment
for the
health
care
system
and schooling.
While
some claim that governors take liability for making a
payment
for healthcare and the educational
system
, the opposite makes a statement that neither
health
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care
nor education
are
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accountable to the authority. I would contend that it is integral for the
state
to shoulder responsibility for the
health
care
system
and the education but it is not full to some extent. Without a shadow of a doubt, It is vital that the
authority
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spend money
for
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the medical
system
and educational
system
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systems
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.
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explanation for
this
could be
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revamp the quality of executive
as
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for schooling and physical
health
which are indispensable elements to prosper an economy for a county.
For example
, Australia, Germany and China are the leading countries
can
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be cited as compelling instances, in those countries the
state
not only
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free- college
policy
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policies
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but
also
they
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provide
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students with
scholarship
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scholarships
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and
supply
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citizens with medical insurance.
Thus
,
payment
for two integral systems is crucial that the
state
should implement.
While
the necessity of supporting finances for
educational
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system
and medical
care
of the governor
are
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widely acknowledged, its counterpart still
linger
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.
This
is
due to
the fact that the
state
’s budget is not formidable enough to utilize since they must pour money into a wide range of alternative facets and settlers had better make a
payment
for those aspects by the way they will enhance awareness in
health
’s protectiveness and guarantee the quality of study.
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,
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up infrastructure, thriving tourism
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services
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and
extend
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leisure activities can be cited as
a compelling instances
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a compelling instance
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for other fields
which
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are
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apply
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the governor
have
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to invest
in
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. If the
authority
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authorities
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pay in full, Some people who have unhealthy habits
such
as gambling,
smoking
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and smoking
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which have a direct impact on their physical
health
or a number of people who are slothful in study will benefit a bargain it’s unfair for alternative liable people. In short,
although
financing healthcare and education is indispensable for the development of a country, the
state
had not better pay these expenses entirely.
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Ensure that your essay has a clear structure, with separate paragraphs for the introduction, each of your main arguments, and the conclusion. Try to use transitional phrases to move smoothly from one idea to the next.
Task Achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. Each body paragraph should contain one main point that supports your opinion, followed by explanations and examples. Finally, your conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental human rights
  • boosts the country's economy
  • productivity
  • public funding
  • equality and accessibility
  • socio-economic status
  • privatized
  • disparities
  • prioritize
  • people's well-being
  • inefficiencies
  • bureaucratic challenges
  • mixed approach
  • optimize
  • quality
  • availability
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