Some people believe the death penalty is a deterrent and are therefore in favour of capital punishment. How far do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write an essay between 250 -350 words.

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punishment as a method of punishing
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significant role in restraining
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, the opposite makes a statement that
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penalty is an inhumane technique. In my opinion, while the latter is valid to some extent, I
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consider
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warrant is
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approach do not bring graciousness.
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, once sentenced to
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not have a chance to correct
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mistakes. In terms of impediment, if
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know the
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commit and the law stipulates the application of the
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another. For
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should not keep that decree. Though
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of capital punishment has some
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, it cannot overshadow its upsides because the enactment of the
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form. If a person who law-breaking tremendous serious
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not get
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convict,
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crime
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by others.
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penalty is taken into keen consideration. To sum up,
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reality has both pros and cons but based on my
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, we must put the interests of the community above
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interests of the criminal by the way stay
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law.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • deterrent
  • retribution
  • state-sanctioned execution
  • morality
  • justice system
  • wrongful convictions
  • irreversible
  • statistical evidence
  • rehabilitation
  • disciplinary measures
  • ethics
  • recidivism
  • closure
  • human rights
  • corporal punishment
  • life imprisonment
  • penal system
  • societal impact
  • ethical dilemma
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