Many people today, especially in the developed world, are choosing to have fewer children, or none at all. Why is this happening, and do you think it is a good trend? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
No
one
can deny that In this
modern world
a large factor of massive is preferred to making fewer kindergartens, The reason is that all nation's populations will increase dramatically and jobs opportunities will be declined and a huge number of the globe's population does not have any work I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
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world,
To begin
, Nowadays technology is advancing day by day and regions will be developed with the contribution of new youths and new generations couples will choose to have fewer children they have many specific skills but ,unfortunately
their authorities will not provide occupations for their community. Add the comma(s)
unfortunately,
In addition
, New guardians groups will not have any work they think it is hard to survive with a big family and they like to make a few sons and daughters and they feel joyful with a little team. For example
, In
the British news Change preposition
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reveal
headlines Correct subject-verb agreement
reveals
of
their country's population Change preposition
that
will be
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is
the
downfall and their economy Correct article usage
apply
will be
decreased their experts explain Verb problem
has
this
phenomenon as they think their society's newly married couples do
not interested in make new birth and it has an effect on their country.
Verb problem
are
Furthermore
, It depends on the person's choice because they know their state will require to have
a large army to defend their nation against their enemy and each individual will make a maximum of five kids in Verb problem
apply
one
family which will rising
their national safety. Verb problem
raise
On the contrary
, Few children in each community has
no Change the verb form
have
a well
consequence for the public because chunk growth will be essential to growing recession on an international level. Correct word choice
good
For instance
, a Few decades ago In India, Their local population growth will be down due to
their country will be
labour by the British rulers and fortunately Wrong verb form
being
one
day they will independent
of these laws. Add a missing verb
be independent
Thus
, Small groups of children will be paramount instead
of one
large.
In conclusion, I believe In
each family to choose more kindergartens because it has a good impact on national funds and they will Change preposition
apply
doing
good steps in the future life to develop their nations to the top level of the world.Verb problem
take
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