More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern lifestyles which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

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list of health issues, which
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unfortunately
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unfortunately
cannot be treated by allopathy
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alone.One section of people
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situation can be mitigated by renewing contemporary forms of treatment. I agree
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opinion and will discuss the reason for the same in the essay. The stress and
sedantary
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sedentary
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life style
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of the current era
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brought in many conditions like blood pressure, obesity, gout, etc.These conditions are mainly caused by our food consumption habits coupled with limited physical activity. If
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untreated
untreatment
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treatment
it can lead to permanent disability or
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life threatening
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disease, in
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scenario, allopathy
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is the quick answer to bring the vitals under control.
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, to maintain the benefit of the
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and to prevent
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detoriation
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deterioration
, alternative
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like
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,
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etc is key.The alternative medical system requires a complete
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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change and specific diet pattern to be followed extensively.
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addition
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it
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provides
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dosage based on individual composition and needs , which is more effective than a blanket approach along with limited
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. To conclude, Traditional
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is still practised and has withstood the test of time as it has shown significant and long term for both
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physical
phsycial
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physical
and mental ailments,
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should be encouraged.
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