Young people are influenced by friends more than by parents and teachers. Do you agree or disagree?
Adolescents are affected by their
friends
more than their tutors or parents
. I agree with this
statement.
Young people spend more time with their peers than with their parents
and teachers. When they go to school or university they are with their classmates or when they want to eat lunch, they are with them. Therefore
, they will become more similar to their friends
and they will act like them. For example
, all of my friends
at primary school were able to play the piano so I got interested in learning piano. In another instance, my cousin has a lot of friends
who speak English so because of her friends
, she now is able to speak English.
When individuals are of the same age, they can understand each other better therefore
, they can affect each other more than teachers or parents
. For instance
, a person who is in her twenties can communicate with another twenty years old better than his teacher who is in his sixties. People in the same age group have more goals in common. For example
, a student who wants to find a job has similar purposes to another student so they can have an impact on each other better than their family or professors.
In conclusion, youngsters are more impressed by their friends
than anyone else because they spend more time with them and they have the same goals in their life so they can talk to each other more and affect each other in different ways. They can help each other more than their parents
or teachers.Submitted by TUTOO on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite