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Some high school required all student to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies you think is better?

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Educational institutions are quite significant as they are liable for mending the future of the students. It is a debatable topic where one
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 favours wearing
school
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 attire;
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, the other
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 leaves the decision to the
pupils
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 in context to wear uniforms. In my perspective, the institutes should prioritize the use of attires over other sorts of
dresses
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 and related ideas, which along with the conclusion, would be perused in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one
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, the authoritative people associated with the educational institutes should prefer
school
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 attire as these are the symbols of uniformity because the students wearing these
dresses
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 represent the institution as a whole.
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 to
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, the
pupils
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 when wearing attire having the
school
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's logo on them become a medium of advertising, which enhances the goodwill of the institutes. To cite an example, a learner in an academy costume goes to the university and passes through in front of various people who do not even recognize him;
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, from the
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 logo, they immediately get to know which
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 the pupil belongs to.
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, costumes are an effective medium of marketing. On the other
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, some masses support the use of other sorts of
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 in educational institutions, which should be prohibited because there might be a possibility that the learner would wear inappropriate apparel, which may ruin the reputation of the academy, particularly in economies where cultural values matter.
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, in India, where people mostly are connected with their roots of culture and traditions, when the
pupils
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 start wearing short
dresses
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 to institutions would adversely affect not only the institute's goodwill but, other students who would imitate
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 adolescents.
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, wearing free
dresses
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 should be avoided. In conclusion,
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 the learners' decision matters a lot when it comes to wearing their favourite
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, the academies should consider educational values and prohibit
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 practice.
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, the academies should make uniforms compulsory for the
pupils
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.
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