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Some people think that students should have educational leisure activities. Otherwise, it would be a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern times, most people focus on their
work
 but their own self and have less and less time for entertainment and family. I think
this
 situation will bring us more disadvantages than benefits, and I will discuss my reasons in
this
 essay. Focusing on
work
 does help us to make some accomplishments in our career, but I don't think it is the best way because there are lots of costs when we pay lots of attention to
work
.
For example
, working too much makes us tired, and when we get tired we may lose our temper, which will be a disaster. So I think
work
-life balance is more efficient to make achievements in our career.
Besides
, working too much is bad for our family relationships and our life. Some scientific research shows that there are more fights in busy
families
 and the main reason for being busy is working long hours. Sometimes we should think about what we really want, and what our life is meaning for. Most people
work
 for their lives and
families
 but do not live for
work
, but if we put
work
 in front of our lives and
families
, we're more likely to lose the balance between
work
 and life. **
Therefore
**, I think we should leave some time for leisure activities with the
families
.
Although
 working long hours can benefit our career, I think it has more disadvantages because it is neither the best way to make achievements nor a good method to maintain our family relations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • respite
  • rigorous
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • social interaction
  • unstructured play
  • mental health and wellbeing
  • cognitive processing
  • emotional balance
  • real-world applications
  • practical context
  • reinforcing understanding
  • overburden
  • burnout
  • tailoring activities
  • maximize engagement
  • developmental benefits
  • restorative essence
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