In some sountries owing a home rather then renting one is very important for people. Why might be this case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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a sense of safety and responsibility.
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, I believe
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society
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sense of safety. If one can have
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own house, they do not need to
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about the high inflation which will increase the rent each year.
For example
, renting
people
have to suffer yearly going up renting at least 5% to 10%. What’s worse, once they face some
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terrible
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landlord
, they might be suddenly asked to move without any reason , which is risky all the time. Having a
home
can help you get rid of
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uncertain pressure.
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who has
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home
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can attract
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easier since it shows full of safety, compared to nothing.
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it will be huge loading for
people
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, it drives
people
to work hard, which
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society
.
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, the employer will work hard to earn more money, the politician will think more to push more citizen need policy
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such
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lower pricing house, and the
business man
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will
also
provide
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housing
choises
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choices
for
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by the housing demand and eventually stimulate the industry gradually. In brief, driving
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home
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internal concern like mental
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safey
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and external
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like
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recognition
recogniton
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recognition
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two power will generate
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development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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