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Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstance, for example, poverty and other social problems. Others believe that most crimes are caused by people who are bad by nature. Dicuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Human beings have never broken away from the shackles of evil and there has always been a heated discussion over the origins of
crimes
. Some
people
 claim that circumstance
such
 as
poverty
 is responsible for most
crimes
, while others argue that it is the innate dark side of
people
that is
 to blame. From my perspective, the former is more plausible. Few
people
 are born to be devils. There are many exterior contributors that drag an innocent person to the abyss of
crimes
, and
poverty
 is the root cause. Too many thefts or robberies are committed by
people
 who have no other ways to feed their hungry family members or save a dying loved one in great need of an expensive operation or medication. Radical discrimination and injustice
also
 lead to tragic assaults or even homicides.
Besides
, evil influence from the media or other social surroundings is likely to induce
crimes
 as well, which is more typical in the case of juvenile delinquency. Being naive and curious, they may intimate a crime on impulse after seeing a violent film featuring their idols. The dark side of human nature,
on the other hand
, is the cause of certain
crimes
. But these convicts make up only a small proportion.
Such
 ill-minded
people
 choose to damage public property or even attempt to murder just for attention or out of jealousy, And corruption results from greed. It is undeniable that intrinsic psychological defects play a greater role rather than
poverty
 in their self-destruction way. To conclude, evils need proper circumstances to breed. In order to vanquish
crimes
, governments are obliged to eliminate
poverty
 and promote the education of law. Only in
this
 way will the pure soul of man stay untarnished.
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