Because of the global economy, many goods including what, we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, some
countries
have been struggling with economical issues which
results
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in
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difficulties
difficultis
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difficulty
in producing
every day
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needs. To meet these necessities, governments should import goods from far continents. In my position,
although
it has
undoubtedely
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undoubtedly
some disadvantages, the great deal of benefits that it has, outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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. Transiting shipments is taking into consideration much more
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expenses
expensses
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expenses
. Using a variety of means to transport
merchendises
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merchandises
merchandise
makes many troubles. As
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governors
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governers
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have to afford excessively to
countries
, which are not quite close, to get what they want, costs too much.
For instance
, people have to buy expensive commodities which have
imported
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from foreign
countries
,
however
, local goods cost less money. The other factor is delayed delivery
causes
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by unforeseen situations in the way of transportation.
As a result
,
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customers
custemors
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customers
are not satisfied with
this
system. It is a fact that human being needs to supply fundamental requirements to be survived. Even though exporting and importing
ends
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in a huge amount of money which should spend by authorities, it will ease the way we live
in particular
awkward situations, plus, we no longer experience poverty.
For example
, due to some
countries
which are based on
a great resources
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such
as oil, forests, soil and so forth, have not imported products from rich
countries
.
In addition
, they are not able to provide sufficient
foods
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food
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. It is
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probably
probabely
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probably
because of their own policy which leads to
tremendous
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underpriveliged
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underprivileged
people. Though inhabitants would receive
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if governments provided imported products.
Therefore
, the far distance is not
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indispensable
indispensible
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indispensable
when it comes to
life
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of a human. To conclude, being survived and
avoid
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feeling
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of
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poverty outweigh the negative aspects
that
is
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high
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price of commodities and the time of transporting from other
countries
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global economy
  • Consumer choice
  • Economic benefits
  • Job creation
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Infrastructure
  • Standard of living
  • Cost efficiencies
  • Raw materials
  • Production processes
  • Specialization
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Local industries
  • Cultural dilution
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