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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the enviroment. What can government do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Mankind is continuously ruining the environment intentionally or unintentionally and leaving
carbon
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a carbon
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 footprint every single
second
. There
are
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number
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a number
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 of ways authorities can fix these
issues
 while some
issues
 are dependent on individuals.
Human
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A human
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being
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beings
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 is producing
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pollution
polution
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pollution
 and its sources every single day.
This
 has resulted in global warming and pandemics causing millions of people to die each year.
Moreover
,
this
 instability in the environment has affected wild
animal
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animals
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 and sea life. Electronic devices are one of the main reasons behind
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gasses and global warming.
Such
 as gasses used in air conditioners and fridges. To overcome these
issues
, governments should take serious steps to eradicate
rise
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 in
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temperature
temprature
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temperature
 by passing strict laws regarding these problems. Manufacturing of electronic
equipments
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equipment
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 should be banned
with
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old
non eco-friendly
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 gasses.
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Furthermore
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
law
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the law
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 should be passed in order to facilitate those companies who
cares
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 about the health of our universe.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 the responsibility of an individual to act like a responsible citizen and abide
laws
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by laws
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 regarding
health
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the health
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 and safety of the universe.
For example
,
use
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the use
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 of plastic bags should be minimized and
shopers
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shoppers
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should
shoud
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should
 carry fabric bags with them while shopping.
Additionally
, folks must give priority to those
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companies
comapnies
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companies
 which produce goods
cause
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that cause
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 minimum pollution. To conclude, since the inception of mankind, they are continuously damaging and
polluting
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polluted
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 their
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surroundings
sorroundings
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surroundings
 by various means.
This
 is either for the
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luxury
luxuary
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luxury
 or getting basic living items. It is
mutual
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the mutual
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 responsibility of the authorities and the masses to take serious actions to fix these
issues
.
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