ancient buildings cause today and what can be done to solve these problems.

It is hard to deny that so many old
buildings
have caused problems like the high risk of falling down or taking up the land resource without utilisation which
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attracted lots of attention from
people
and the governments. Whereas there are some measurements could be taken to tackle these problems. Here comes some problems with the previous
house
.
First
of all, ancient constructions around the urban and rural areas would occupy much space which
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conflicted with the fast
growing
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of
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population demand
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and caused a huge waste in the land that could not be fully usable.
Secondly
, if we need to maintain and protect all the old
buildings
, it would be extremely costly and time-consuming as the ancient
buildings
have a huge amount around the world.
Thirdly
, it is dangerous for
people
to live in or use what is always happening and be pressed by the media
such
as the old building falling down which leads to
people
's death or serious injury. While our ancestors do not have the advanced technology like 21 century to produce more strong materials or use professional machines like today to build
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house
.
However
, it is glad to know that the issues still could be fixed if governments could do something about them. on the one hand ,
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governments governments
should put some
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to protect and maintain those
buildings
which contain a lot of historical meaning like the Forbidden City , so that the places could attract
people
from other countries to go sightseeing and the money would be
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by the tourism industry which would not be costly and make
further
utilise with the spaces without wastage ,
On the other hand
, the governments should encourage
people
to abandon the ancient equity as well as live in new
buildings
, what is more , the authority should
also
make reconstruction for the
house
which are risky to live, after doing
this
,
people
would able to live in a safer place and could help more
people
to stay in a
house
with better quality ,
furthermore
, it could
also
be satisfied the need of increasing populations.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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