In many countries, governments spend alot of money celebrating national holidays and festivals. However, some people think that spending money on these celebrations is a waste. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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A large number of special

celebration

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are

being

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held around the

world

every year.

Governemet

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Government

allocates some

money

conmemorate

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commemorate

these holidays, yet some

people

considered that spending

money

such

events

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useless

. In

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essay, I will show why

festivals

are worth of

money

investing.

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First

Fisrt

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First

of all,

festivals

are

fundamental

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part of human history. It is well known that special days are celebrated because some remarkable actions were taken place

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such

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day

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wich

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allows

all

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population not only to remember but

also

to know about their own history. To justify, one of the most common

festival

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around the

world

the

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independence day,

where

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all citizens gather together in order to

conmemorate

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commemorate

their ancestor's

effort

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. What

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more,

festivals

help countries with tourism and culture

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It is undeniable that these

events

gather a vast number of

people

from different parts of the

world

, which may

helps

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with

internal

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economy as well as the spread of cultural information. For

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instance

intance

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instance

, Brazil holds "The festival of Rio"; it became one of the most famous

festivals

around the

world

, helping

brazilians

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with some informal and formal jobs,

exclisively

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exclusively

related to

the

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it.

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, there are some other big

events

where

people

spend

money

in those countries, because of their

festivals

but

also

because of their food. In conclusion, allocating

money

to hold national and international

events

in their countries helps not only their internal economy but

also

allows

people

to know about the history behind

such

events

. if politicians do not invest in their

festivals

, their culture can not

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progress

progres

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progress

neither

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and neither

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can their economy.

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