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In many countries, governments spend alot of money celebrating national holidays and festivals. However, some people think that spending money on these celebrations is a waste. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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A large number of special
celebration
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 are
being
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held around the
world
 every year.
Governemet
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Government
 allocates some
money
 to
conmemorate
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commemorate
 these holidays, yet some
people
 considered that spending
money
 on
such
events
 is
usesless
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useless
. In
this
 essay, I will show why
festivals
 are worth of
money
 investing.
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First
Fisrt
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First
 of all,
festivals
 are
fundamental
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 part of human history. It is well known that special days are celebrated because some remarkable actions were taken place
in
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such
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day
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,
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wich
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 allows
all
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 population not only to remember but
also
 to know about their own history. To justify, one of the most common
festival
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 around the
world
 is
the
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independence day,
where
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when
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 all citizens gather together in order to
conmemorate
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commemorate
 their ancestor's
effort
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. What
is
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 more,
festivals
 help countries with tourism and culture
.
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 It is undeniable that these
events
 gather a vast number of
people
 from different parts of the
world
, which may
helps
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 with
internal
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the internal
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 economy as well as the spread of cultural information. For
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instance
intance
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instance
, Brazil holds "The festival of Rio"; it became one of the most famous
festivals
 around the
world
, helping
brazilians
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Brazilians
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 with some informal and formal jobs,
exclisively
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exclusively
 related to
the
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it.
Similary
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Similarly
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, there are some other big
events
 where
people
 spend
money
 in those countries, because of their
festivals
 but
also
 because of their food. In conclusion, allocating
money
 to hold national and international
events
 in their countries helps not only their internal economy but
also
 allows
people
 to know about the history behind
such
events
. if politicians do not invest in their
festivals
, their culture can not
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progress
progres
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progress
,
neither
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and neither
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 can their economy.
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