In many countries, governments spend alot of money celebrating national holidays and festivals. However, some people think that spending money on these celebrations is a waste. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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part of human history. It is well known that special days are celebrated because some remarkable actions were taken place

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independence day,

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all citizens gather together in order to

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more,

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help countries with tourism and culture

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economy as well as the spread of cultural information. For

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, Brazil holds "The festival of Rio"; it became one of the most famous

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because of their food. In conclusion, allocating

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can their economy.

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In many countries, governments spend alot of money celebrating national holidays and festivals. However, some people think that spending money on these celebrations is a waste. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

Fully explain your ideas

A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

in some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantagges and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Today, people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on pp’s lives? To you agree or disagree

successful sports professionals can earn a great amount of money than other people of important professions.some think this is fully justified while other say it is unfair.discuss both views and give opinion