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Some people say that the emotional quotient is more important for people’s success than the intelligence quotient. Do you agree or dis agree?

#people #quotient #people’s #success #intelligence #dis
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To have success in
this
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 modern world,
people
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 need to have more skills than only
intelligence
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, especially the emotional
quotient
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. Some
people
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 suppose that it is more important for
people
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's success than
intelligence
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. I agree with
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 statement.
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 with,
people
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 who have a high
intelligence
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quotient
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 have the ability for learning and research. It takes them less time to learn new subjects than others. They can have good qualifications. It is true that
people
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 who have a high degree or certificate are easier to employ.
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, it is difficult to succeed if they only have
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good qualifications and other skills are zero.
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: some
people
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 are good at math or physic but cannot communicate well with others, and feel shy or embarrassed while present in front of their classmates. They cannot control their emotion which is known as the emotional
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.
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, a person with a high emotional
quotient
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 has good interpersonal skills. In
this
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 modern world,
people
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 rarely work alone, especially through the years of the epidemic, many companies work from home and communication skill is very important in
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 circumstance. With good communication ,skill
people
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 can communicate well with each other and enhance the work operation. I believe that
people
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 with high emotional quotients have flexible and positive minds, which help them easier to achieve their golds. In conclusion, even though the
intelligence
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quotient
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 takes an important part in the intellectual power of
people
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, the emotional
quotient
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 will help to utilise
intelligence
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. These two quotients support each other and take an important role in
people
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's success.
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