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Some people say that the emotional quotient is more important for people’s success than the intelligence quotient. Do you agree or dis agree?

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To have success in
this
 modern world,
people
 need to have more skills than only
intelligence
, especially the emotional
quotient
. Some
people
 suppose that it is more important for
people
's success than
intelligence
. I agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with,
people
 who have a high
intelligence
quotient
 have the ability for learning and research. It takes them less time to learn new subjects than others. They can have good qualifications. It is true that
people
 who have a high degree or certificate are easier to employ.
However
, it is difficult to succeed if they only have
a
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good qualifications and other skills are zero.
For example
: some
people
 are good at math or physic but cannot communicate well with others, and feel shy or embarrassed while present in front of their classmates. They cannot control their emotion which is known as the emotional
quotient
.
In other words
, a person with a high emotional
quotient
also
 has good interpersonal skills. In
this
 modern world,
people
 rarely work alone, especially through the years of the epidemic, many companies work from home and communication skill is very important in
this
 circumstance. With good communication ,skill
people
 can communicate well with each other and enhance the work operation. I believe that
people
 with high emotional quotients have flexible and positive minds, which help them easier to achieve their golds. In conclusion, even though the
intelligence
quotient
 takes an important part in the intellectual power of
people
, the emotional
quotient
 will help to utilise
intelligence
. These two quotients support each other and take an important role in
people
's success.
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