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Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a tendency, nowadays, that due to
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 accessibility in developed countries,
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 have more eating options in schools.
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, many places serve unhealthy
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 for their
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 during lunch breaks. I think
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 is absolutely unacceptable and should be banned.
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, in the forthcoming paragraphs, I will elaborate on the main negative problems related to the issue.
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 with, due to a lack of experience, youngsters are not aware enough,
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, they usually do not worry about the consequences related to bad eating patterns.
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, if
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 did not stop eating unhealthy
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 during lunch breaks they would face serious health challenges in the future. That's why it is vitally important to regulate and control the quality of serving
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 as well as not allow sugary drinks and fast
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 to be sold in schools.
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, it is known that American
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 tend to have more problems with weight compared to Europeans;
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 happens because of easier access to fast
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 in schools and other places.
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, by selling unhealthy
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 and sugary drinks in educational places people make it normal to encourage pupils to eat
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.
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,
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 would not even know that unhealthy
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 is literally bad for them.
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, they are at risk to take it as a routine and eat
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 every day.
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, I used to eat junk
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 at my university just because it was cheaper than normal.
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 of
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, I got used to eating fast
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 and could not even think about other options.  In conclusion, I would say that serving junk
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 in school has undoubtedly negative developments. Real health problems are possible consequences of
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 unhealthy
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, whereas taking it as an eating routine would only make the situation worse.
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