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When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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Nowadays, many
students
 decide to change schools for several reasons in their careers, and sometimes they have to deal with new problems. In my opinion, educational institutes can provide assistance for these individuals by organizing open
days
 and including them in activities with other
students
. In
this
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 I will explain my point of view and I will provide some examples.
To begin
 with, in order to make the adaptation easier for pupils, schools must organise open
days
.
This
 means that a couple of
days
 before the student will join the new institute, both principal and teachers should invite new
students
 to visit the building, showing them each relevant space like a garden, their future classroom but
also
 bathrooms and recreational areas,
for instance
.
Furthermore
,
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school
's staff should explain to new individuals how the organization works, like hours when the library will be open or when the supervisor's office can receive them to fix a problem.
In addition
, another useful action is to organize some activities for classmates and new entries.
This
 will immediately create a sort of feeling among them, marking the start of new relationships.
For example
, teachers could invite pupils to spend time together playing a soccer game during the weekend or maybe taking a long walk in nature.
This
 will make new arrivals feel good and future classmates will start to know them. As an example, during my
first
 year at high
school
, the principal organized an excursion for new
students
 of that year in a big park just a couple of
days
 before the
school
 started. In conclusion, I believe that
students
 who decide to move to a new
school
 have to face some challenges with the new environment, and in order to make the adaptation easier for them, the
school
's staff should organize open
days
 and outdoor activities like soccer games before the new experience for them will start.
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