It has been proved that smoking kills. In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public place except in certain area. All countries should make these rules. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In
this
modern era, many
people
are believing that smoking injuries to health and it died
people
. Many countries publicly smoking is ben except few locations. I strongly agreed
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paragraph with suitable reasons. Supporting my agreement
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the given statement, I firmly believe that smoking is the major cause of death and
unrecoverable
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disease.
For example
, cancer around the world. Cigarettes contain
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nicotine and tobacco which is mainly drawn to the disease. In fact, smoking cause several other problems related to health like hypertension, heart attack and many more. As per the recent survey conducted by India’s largest NGOs on World Health Day, the report says that 40
percentage
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of
people
died due to smoking every year as they are used to
smoke
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daily more than 3
time
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in
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.
Furthermore
, old age
people
are habited to smoke
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made bidi which
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made from
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leaves and tobacco. These are the habits direct impact
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lungs
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the lungs
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which increase the chances
developing
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of developing
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the
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cancer.
In addition
to
another supporting points
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against
this
statement, there are several benefits to
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smoking publicly. Prohibiting smoking will improve the quality of the air and oxygen.
As a result
, the pollution is decreased, and
people
can breathe in and out the clean air and it is preventing the risk of
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heart attack in nonsmoker
people
.
However
, there are some
of
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the
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negatives as well
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example, If the smoking ban
at
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public places,
manufacturing
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company sales count will be reduced drastically
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as a result
it would be impacted
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to
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the company revenues and government
earning
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earnings
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as taxes. In conclusion, I personally believe that smoking must be prohibited in to publicly
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because it
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would be beneficial for individuals, and it will reduce the disease globally.
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