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The health benefits of physical exercise are well known. Despite this, many people do not exercise regularly. what are the reason for this? What could be done to encourage them to exercise regularly?

#health #exercise #people #reason
We all know the proverb that An Apple a Day keeps a Doctor away. Doing
exercise
 helps a lot of
people
 with their weight management and physical
health
. Doing
exercise
 keeps
one
 healthy and helps them to follow a healthy
lifestyle
. Waking early in the morning and doing physical
exercise
 in a garden helps because in the morning they get fresh air and keep their day productive. Working out relaxes the mind and heart and keeps
one
 in a stable mind. It is very important to follow a healthy
lifestyle
 in today's generation there are much of fast food which attracts
ones
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 and they go and eat. What about cutting down calories which
is
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 formed inside you which will give you different types of
health
 issues like thyroid,
cholestrol
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cholesterol
, weight gaining, sugar,
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diabetes
diabites
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diabetes
 and
what not
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. Everyone knows how to follow a healthy
lifestyle
 yet they fail to do
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it
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ikt
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 because they are bored or they have no time for themselves. In
this
 working busy life
people
 are forgetting how to live a healthy
lifestyle
 and are behind in earning money. We all know
Health
 Is Wealth
a
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famous proverb a person tol could relate to themselves. Some
people
also
 give a reason
of
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 not getting up early in the morning because they were tired
last
 night of a hectic schedule. Rather
making
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 reason
one
 should
least
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 get up in the morning and go for a walk. The benefits of
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going
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goin g
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going
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 for a walk are the fresh air, enhanced surroundings, the voice of birds chirping and getting Vitamin D which is useful for
one
.  To encourage
one
 ,
one
 should be responsible for their own
health
 after covid many
people
 started
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maintaining
maitaining
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maintaining
 a healthy
lifestyle
 and
take
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 care of their immune
system
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.
One
 should
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regularly
regular
regulary
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regularly
exercise
 and maintain a healthy
lifestyle
 which not only
help
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 but will motivate
other person
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another person
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 to take care of themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical activity
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Endurance
  • Flexibility
  • Strength training
  • Preventive measure
  • Chronic diseases
  • Mental well-being
  • Incentivize
  • Work-life balance
  • Accessibility
  • Affordability
  • Motivation
  • Awareness
  • Community outreach
  • Wellness initiative
  • Fitness tracker
  • Habit formation
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