“Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?”

Today's generation, they came up with different websites which help
people
to interact and connect with other individuals or use them for news updates. Earlier using Facebook was the most common social
media
used by all types of age groups. It played an important role in youngster life. Using Facebook was not an issue earlier
also
. Nowadays misusing of social
media
crime has increased. In past years using social
media
and learning about new technology was a task now everything has been so easy for
people
using social
media
or any new app which entertains them. The uses of social networking sites are misused by other youngsters these days which leads to Cyber Crime. It actually gives a huge4 impact on an individual as well as on society. They give permission to
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child
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so that they should not misuse it but they later misuse it and lead other
people
in trouble, because of the development of technologies it has become easier to hack one's information. Today all
people
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to interact with new
people
and they start trusting them
and
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later they misuse their information and trouble them later which force another person to commit suicide. Many cases
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been filed against misusing of social
media
and More than lakhs of kids has been suffered
by
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deprssion
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depression
mental
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harassment
harasment
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harassment
and
traumaswhich
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traumas which
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given by them not only
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harassment
but
also
leads
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many kids to commit suicide.
At
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some extent
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agree using
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social
solcial
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social
media
or Facebook is not a crime but
misuing
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missing
misusing
and leaking pictures messages chats conning
them
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leads to stopping all the activities
which
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made.  The conclusion to
this
is that using social
media
in
a
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correct way will not lead to
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such
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crimes
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crim es
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crimes
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. Trusting strangers easily will lead to different problems and will
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another person and will not only affect their health but will
also
disturb their surroundings and their parents as well. Using these sites smartly will not cause any
problem
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problems
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and will decrease the suicide ratio in
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the
thw
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the
world.
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