There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays youth people feel more pressure related to their future academic success.
This
led to a widespread opinion that non-academic subjects
should be taken away from the school
curriculum so children
to focus on their main lessons. From my point of view, I fully disagree with deleting these subjects
as they are essential for the general fitness of children
and getting everyday skills
.
One evident drawback of stopping teaching PE is that children
would be less fit. Although
this
measure saves time for children
and makes it possible to focus more on the main lessons, physical exercises are necessary for children
to grow healthy. For instance
, children
who have regularly missed PE classes tend to come across problems related to backbone and heart more than those who have always taken part in those classes. Being physically active also
increases the productivity of a person, in other words
doing more exercises allows pupils to study more effectively than avoiding them. As a result
, although
at the moment pupils would have development
in their education level, in the long term Replace the word
developed
this
measure would cause a lot of damage to the
health and productivity.
Another point for the secondary Change the word
their
subjects
remaining in the curriculum is that they give children
useful life skills
. Apart from formal ,education
there are Add a comma
,education
also
everyday skills
that children
should have in the arsenal before graduation from school
. Running fast or being able to prepare food when the parents are absent, for instance
, are important for becoming an autonomic person and being able to deal with everyday difficulties. Evidently, having a school
consisting of only academic subjects
would lead to the adults having a lack of essential surviving skills
, which is disastrous for every society.
In conclusion, I do not consider cutting out all secondary subjects
from the school
syllabus as the right measure, as it has a lot of drawbacks related to the health and autonomy of future adults.Submitted by sanasaryan.gar on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
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- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
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- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
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