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Many people believe social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact in both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

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Many
people
 argue that social media platforms have had a large negative effect on the nation (
such
 as Facebook
platform
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platforms
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).
This
 essay disagrees because these platforms have positive and negative aspects, if that social networking has used in negative ways that will be negative for the user, and I think the positivity in social media is more than the negativity.
First
 of all, social networking sites have a lot of positive and negative aspects, so in my view that if the user uses it in a wrong way and follows negative things that will impact him/her in their daily life, and will affect the society that around him/her.
For example
, a survey from a university in America on the U. S nation said that the majority of
people
 who watch and follow negative stuff and so-called influencers are affected by their psychological health and most of them have gotten depressed.
Second
, in my opinion, the good stuff in social media is more than the bad things,
for instance
, I read several articles and watched videos about
people
 who influenced and became successful individuals most of them were following a stimulus content, and in my own experience, I get a lot of motivations every day when I browse Twitter and watch tweets from successful
people
. To conclude, many
people
 believe that social networking platforms have a negative effect on
people
, in my opinion, I think that will be negative if it uses in
a
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 wrong way,
also
 the positive content is more than the negative.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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