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Nowadays more and more museums and art galleries around the world are putting their material contents online. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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By Somayeh Mousavi
Food
 is one of the essential needs of human beings. It provides
people
 with energy and a variety of nutrients to perform well throughout the day. Importantly, there would be no life if
people
 can not survive without eating
food
. It should be noted that
food
 is very vital for the growth of the body efficiently. Apart from
this
,
food
 protects the body from viruses and bacteria and helps the body to fight against diseases. There are different types of
food
such
 as fruits, vegetables, meat, fish, dairy products and so on .these types of
food
 can be considered healthy
food
.
Nevertheless
, some
people
 like better fast
foods
.
Although
 healthy
food
 and fast
food
 have similarities in containing calories , there are some dissimilarities in convenience,
health
 benefits and cost between them. As for differences between fast
food
 and healthy
food
, convenience can be taken into account. Most
people
 do not have enough time to cook or wait for a meal.
Therefore
, fast
food
 becomes a great solution for
people
 who need
food
 to be prepared instantly. Another difference between fast
food
 and healthy
food
 is the
health
 benefits. Healthy
food
 is rich in nutrients, protein, vitamins, fibre and minerals.
On the other hand
, fast
foods
 like hot dogs, hamburgers, and fried potatoes are less in nutrients.
Consequently
, fast
foods
 affect
health
 and create many diseases. As opposed to healthy
food
, fast
food
 causes diabetes, cancer, high cholesterol, etc. The
last
 difference between fast
food
 and healthy
food
 is the cost. Healthy
food
 is not as inexpensive as fast
food
. Unlike healthy
foods
, fast
foods
 are less expensive and they are easy to find and make. To sum up, fast
food
 and healthy
food
 can be eaten every day , whether
people
 choose fast
food
 or healthy
food
 depends on the convenience,
health
 benefits and costs.
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