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Nowadays more and more museums and art galleries around the world are putting their material contents online. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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By Somayeh Mousavi
Food
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 is one of the essential needs of human beings. It provides
people
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 with energy and a variety of nutrients to perform well throughout the day. Importantly, there would be no life if
people
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 can not survive without eating
food
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. It should be noted that
food
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 is very vital for the growth of the body efficiently. Apart from
this
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,
food
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 protects the body from viruses and bacteria and helps the body to fight against diseases. There are different types of
food
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such
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 as fruits, vegetables, meat, fish, dairy products and so on .these types of
food
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 can be considered healthy
food
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.
Nevertheless
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, some
people
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 like better fast
foods
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.
Although
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 healthy
food
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 and fast
food
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 have similarities in containing calories , there are some dissimilarities in convenience,
health
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 benefits and cost between them. As for differences between fast
food
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 and healthy
food
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, convenience can be taken into account. Most
people
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 do not have enough time to cook or wait for a meal.
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, fast
food
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 becomes a great solution for
people
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 who need
food
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 to be prepared instantly. Another difference between fast
food
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 and healthy
food
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 is the
health
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 benefits. Healthy
food
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 is rich in nutrients, protein, vitamins, fibre and minerals.
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, fast
foods
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 like hot dogs, hamburgers, and fried potatoes are less in nutrients.
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, fast
foods
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 affect
health
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 and create many diseases. As opposed to healthy
food
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, fast
food
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 causes diabetes, cancer, high cholesterol, etc. The
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 difference between fast
food
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 and healthy
food
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 is the cost. Healthy
food
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 is not as inexpensive as fast
food
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. Unlike healthy
foods
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, fast
foods
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 are less expensive and they are easy to find and make. To sum up, fast
food
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 and healthy
food
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 can be eaten every day , whether
people
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 choose fast
food
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 or healthy
food
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 depends on the convenience,
health
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 benefits and costs.
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