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COMMUNITIES AND HELPING EACH OTHER We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#communities #world #countries
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Do you help other
people
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? .
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 it is necessary?
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 I think that in general is not
necessary
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 help to other
people
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 but it’s a good
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option
opcion
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option
 definitely
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 in
one
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 case
one
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 family don’t have money because they were different problems but the father
need
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needs
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 to
operation
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for
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on
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he
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his
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 health
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therefore
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 the family need help! , and the
people
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 that id “solidary” helping
this
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 family and
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 good for the humanity in
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 world,
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 not all
people
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is
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 solidary and
this
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are
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is
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 not
the
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ugly but yes the bad. Similar to
this
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 example I
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mentioned
mencioned
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mentioned
 about my experiences
in
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,in
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this
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 case,
first
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one
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 day I saw the child in the square and he worked
with
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for
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 only three years!, in my
opinion
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this
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aren’t
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 just because he only learned to speak very well, in
this
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situation
situacion
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situation
 my mother and I gave he differents candys and to or three t-shirts
consequently
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 his happier was the best moment for my mother and I, in
additionally
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other
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another
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 example is with my school because I’m in Don Bosco school and I am in the prom,
this
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 year we travelled to two communities the
first
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CHAMINA
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, and the
second
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one
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 was MISKA. In
this
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case
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 I was going to
CHAMINA
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 obviously
traveled
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travelling
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 with my prom was
one
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 of the best
experience
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experiences
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 in my life because I know other
place
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places
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 but
this
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 place is very different that
live
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 in the city
such
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 as in
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Chamina
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China
 the children are walking to their school but kilometres!
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 the best part was the
communite
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community
 helped
one
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with
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other
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another
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,
this
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communite
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community
 is very small
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 my prom helps to
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Chamina
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China
 with different objects, shoes, snacks and more but
specially
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 for the children.
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, in my
opinion
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 the
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different
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differents
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different
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 moods for helping
to
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apply
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other
people
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 are good and
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 is a good cause, is the “solidary” the best
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option
opcion
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 in your life but not the obligation
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 the small communities have the beautiful moments with helping
one
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 with other in their community.
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