Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

New types of technology mean that you can easily connect with other
people
.
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trust that social network sites,
such
as
facebook
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,
instgram
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Instagram
twitter
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and
snapchat
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have a passive effect on juniors and their
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personal
persnsonal
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personal
relationships
while others believe that these sites make
people
join and close together in a helpful way.
Firstly
, let us consider what makes meaningful
relationships
. Being able to take, meet and join other
people
.
However
, technology
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these
days make all
people
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lazy
,
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because
the
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can go shopping or
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social network.In
this
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people
don’t have to go shopping or get out to meet their friends. Especially for
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teenager
teenagers
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they spend most of their time on
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youtube
watching videos or tv shows, and they look ecstasy to finish what they watch and don’t have
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desire to go out or have fun,
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led to
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effect on their
relationships
with their friends and family
memeber
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members
member
. Many argue that social networks allow us to connect with a variety of
people
from different places and different places and backgrounds.
On the other hand
, these websites
makes
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you
seeing
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people
in the real world is very different from meeting them online,
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are living in Australia and your relatives are living in America, social
media
makes you
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connect
contact
with them in the easiest way by calling them on a video call, and makes you feel as if you are sitting together at the same place. That means social
media
has a positive effect on your relationship based on more than short text
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communications
communicates
. In
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conclusion
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conclusion
, social
media
has negative and positive effects on young
people
. While it is true that social
media
sites can be very useful and help us to connect and keep in touch with others, we need to be careful and not forget that we can only make real friends in the real world. I personally believe that these are
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relationships
that
last
a lifetime.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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