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millions of bales of cotton in five different countries over the period 2004 to 2018

#millions #bales #cotton #five #countries #period
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trend
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of
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 each
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. The highest
productor
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production
 of
cotton
 was China
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 ten years
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form
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 2004 to 2014, when India exceed the figures
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 won in 2018 with almost 30
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of
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bales of
cotton
, ending in
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 place. India increase its production constantly, starting in the
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 position in 2004 below
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 decreased until 2009, having a little recuperation in 2010, and showing intervals positive and negative until 2015, where
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 position.
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, in the fourth and fifth position are Pakistan and Brazil, with
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similar
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. Pakistan began 2004
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millions
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bales of
cotton
 and
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, Brazil began
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millions
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 both culminated with almost the same figures in 2018. The trend between Pakistan and Brazil was equivalent and very competitive each other.
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