Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

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teachers

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the best salary in the world, and have facilities provided by law.

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humanity

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teachers

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engineers

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With the rise of the internet more and more people are getting their news from social media platforms. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that as nuclear technology threatens the peace of the world, it should be restricted.

Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leiure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.