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Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

#teachers #students
In a modern world like
this
 that we are living, any topic brings up a controversial
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discussion
dicussion
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discussion
 for society.
In addition
, certain people believe that
teachers
 have being paid only if their students learn as well. I have my personal opinion and
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I'll
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this
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Firstly
, in my opinion,
teachers
 should
made
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 the best salary in the world, and have facilities provided by law.
Although
the
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humanity
don'
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t
 give the right value
for
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teachers
, they are working hard to educate our
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 and forming our doctors,
engenieer
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engineers
engineer
, lawer, and so. According to my experience in Brazil,
teachers
 have
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hardly
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 to teach
over than
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matters
such
 as math,
geography
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, and so, they are in charge of teaching
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responsibilities
responsibility
responsabilites
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responsibilities
, humanity
feel
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 and love. In
other word
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,
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developing
developoping
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developing
good
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 person
to
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future
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.
Secondly
,
teachers
 in Brazil have to work three shifts to provide a good situation for their family, even
so
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 they haven'
t
 made much money at all, actually in a private
scenarium
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scenario
. Brazil has a public education,
however
,
this
 is only for those people who don'
t
 have
good
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 financial
condition
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 to study in a private school.
Thus
,
for
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those
teachers
 who face the public system of education have to
struggling
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 hardly to be safe due to public schools
are
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along
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 the poorest and
dangerous
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neighborhood
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. Briefing, no matter the system
teachers
 are working, public or private school, their profits don'
t
 have to be associated with students increasement. Obviously, as
many
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profession
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, there are good and bad professionals and each one
need
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 to be treated particularly
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