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that we are living, any topic brings up a controversial

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discussion

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discussion

for society.

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, certain people believe that

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have being paid only if their students learn as well. I have my personal opinion and

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, in my opinion,

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the best salary in the world, and have facilities provided by law.

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humanity

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give the right value

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, they are working hard to educate our

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children

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and forming our doctors,

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engineers

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, lawer, and so. According to my experience in Brazil,

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to teach

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matters

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, and so, they are in charge of teaching

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responsibilities

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, humanity

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and love. In

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good

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person

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in Brazil have to work three shifts to provide a good situation for their family, even

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made much money at all, actually in a private

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. Brazil has a public education,

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is only for those people who don'

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to study in a private school.

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who face the public system of education have to

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hardly to be safe due to public schools

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the poorest and

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. Briefing, no matter the system

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are working, public or private school, their profits don'

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have to be associated with students increasement. Obviously, as

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profession

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, there are good and bad professionals and each one

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to be treated particularly

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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