Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

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I will present my opinion about the topic . In earlier times teaching was one of the most

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has lost its charm and the youth today is drifting away from it.As per the research conducted by Times

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performance will change the teaching job to target oriented job .

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should be kept away from the corporate culture and

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who shape future of the civilization should be fairly compensated and

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should be on providing quality education to all

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irrespective of their ability to learn as all children have

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at which they develop.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems. Explain how these problems are affecting the public. Suggest some changes that could be made

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Some people encourage young children to leave their parents’ house as soon as they become adults while others say children should stay at their parents’ house as long as possible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.