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Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

#teachers #students
Teaching is a novel
profession
 which is responsible for shaping the future of
the
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civilization . In many
civilazations
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civilizations
civilization
teachers
 have been given a status
next
 to the god . They can make or break the
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future
furure
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future
 of the
next
 generation. It is often debatable that
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remuneration
renumeration
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 paid to
the
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teachers
 should be based on how much their
students
 learn. In the following
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 I will present my opinion about the topic . In earlier times teaching was one of the most
sought after
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profession
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. It was not only
well paid
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 but
also
well respected
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among
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the
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society.
However
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 the
profession
 has lost its charm and the youth today is drifting away from it.As per the research conducted by Times
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 the main reason for
this
 is that
Teacher's
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teachers
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 are not well paid in
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comparison
comaprison
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comparison
 to
other
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another profession
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profession
. In my
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opinion
opionion
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opinion
 fixing Teacher's
salary
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salaries
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 based on how
much student
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many students
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learn
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 is not
fair
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 thing to do and will result in
further
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 decrease in
interest
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 of youth in the
profession
. Fixing the compensation based on
student's
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 performance will change the teaching job to target oriented job .
Teachers
 will compete with one
other
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 and preference would be given to brighter
students
 . In
this
 race for better
intensive
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 the
student
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students
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 who
are
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 weaker and
require
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 extra attention will be neglected and will lose the most .
This
intensive oriented
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 model will kill the very purpose of
good
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 education .In my
opinion
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teachers
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teachers'
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 salaries should be revised fairly and we should not bring
this
 race mentality
in
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this
 novel
profession
 .
This
 will ensure that all
students
 get proper attention and
no
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lose
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 is done to them . In the
end
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 I would like to conclude that teaching
job
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jobs
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 should be kept away from the corporate culture and
sales oriented
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 salary . The
teachers
 who shape future of the civilization should be fairly compensated and
focus
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 should be on providing quality education to all
students
 irrespective of their ability to learn as all children have
different
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the different
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pace
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 at which they develop.
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