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AUTOMATION CONCERNING PEOPLE’S LIFESTYLE. (ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES) We are living in times when technology has made our life so much easier. However, people should face a lot of advantages and disadvantages of having automatic devices at home/work/school nowadays? Describe your for and against ideas.

#automation #people’s #lifestyle #times #technology #life #people #face #devices #home #work #school
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automation
 in our
people
’s
in
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lifestyle is
in
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all
of
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over
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 the
world
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worlds
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, we are living in times when
technology
 has made our life so much easier.
However
,
people
 should face a lot of advantages and disadvantages of having automatic in
our
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 lives.
The
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technology
 in the
last
 years, it advance every day and is
an
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important and it’s a good tool for us
besides
, without
the
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technology
, we can’t learn and would be boring, but
the
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automation
 concerning
in
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our lives and exist the advantage and disadvantages. The advantages
in
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the
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automation
,
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that
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the
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that
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technology
 has made our life so much easier, exist
many
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technology
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technologies
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for example
 cellphones, computers and
alexa
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Alexa
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,
Alexa
 it’s a robot
you
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that
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 said
differents
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different
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thing
thinng
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things
,
such
 as
Alexa
 can you play music? Or
Alexa
 can you turn the slide,
Alexa
 can it,
and
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it’s very interesting and incredible the
technology
 is better than some
people
. The disadvantages some
people
 are addicted to
technology
 and
they
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don’t like
study
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,
the
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automation
 is very expensive the
technology
 is better than some
people
, is very bad because many jobs
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prefer
prefere
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prefer
 to change a normal person to a robot In conclusion, I think
the
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automation
 is good but we can learn and we can be better
the
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technology
, we can
learn
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the
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thechology
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technology
 should be
good
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a good
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 or bad tool.
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