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The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.
The diagrams compare the changes in a coastal town between 1950 and 2007.  From the
overall
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 perspective, more public buildings and residences had been built by 2007,
while
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 the main
road
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 nearly remained unchanged. 
According to
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 the first map, most of the land of the provided town was
grassland
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, which was divided into two parts by the central roads that led right to the seaside. Three buildings were distributed in the industrial area, which is located northwest of the map. A car
park
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 was located on the northeast corner of the map. The car
park
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 and the industrial area were linked by a small
road
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 crossing to the main roads.  In the second image, the majority of
grassland
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 had been developed. The western
grassland
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 had been replaced by public buildings or facilities, which were a
park
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, a swimming pool, a multi-stories car
park
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, and a cinema from north to south, respectively.
On the contrary
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,
grassland
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 was used for residences,
such
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 as apartments and houses. The small secondary
road
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 had relocated to the southern part of the town, with some shops operating along the north side of
this
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road
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.
Besides
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, a yacht marina was built along the seaside.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, grassland, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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