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Most agree that we should be training children to recycle waste to preserve the Earth’s natural resources. However, some believe that it is parents who should teach their children to recycle waste, while others feel schools are more responsible.

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There is an opinion that the main responsibility of teaching
children
 to recycle waste lies
on
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 their
parents
.
Nevertheless
, it's argued by some that it mostly should be made by
schools
. Even though the role of
parents
 is important, in my view,
this
 issue requires a more systematic approach which is only possible in
schools
. A
belief
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 that teaching
children
 to deal with recyclable waste definitely makes sense.
Children
 often copy the habits of their older family members . So, if their
parents
 take care of nature, the chances that
children
 of
this
 family will adopt their habits are much higher.
However
, there are still those who advocate for the importance of
schools
 in process of training
children
 to deal with garbage.
This
 allows involving more
children
 in taking care of nature, even if their
parents
 don't pay much attention to it.
Furthermore
, there is research made in Scandinavian countries, that
parents
 are getting used to sorting waste if their
children
 started to do so. To conclude, it's important if
parents
 teach their
children
 dealing with garbage to take care of nature, having said that, a systematical approach made in school may involve more people in
this
 and even changes
parents
' opinion about environmental problems. That's why, in my opinion, the role of
schools
 is more important if we say about the issue of preserving the Earth's natural resources.
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