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Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performances from the screen and no need to watch it live. To what extend do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

#entertainment #performances #screen
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 world is coming to the streaming era
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 when many streaming
sites
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 have competed to possess variations of content that can attract
audiences
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 as TV shows, movies,
theatre
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 plays and concerts.
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, many people think that they just need to enjoy their favourite shows at home rather than go to the
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live house
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. I partly agree with
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 opinion. There are several reasons why more and more
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 are fascinated by streaming
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. If they want to watch a live show, they have to buy tickets early or they will be sold out. Streaming can
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 reduce
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 price unimaginably higher than the original.
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,
audiences
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 just can watch a show at the
theatre
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 at a certain time, while
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streaming
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 they can watch anytime they want. Streaming
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 are helpful not only for watchers but
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 for artists. During the pandemic era, many artists perform at no-audience stages and stream
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online. With
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 method, artists are still able to earn money and keep in touch with their fans.
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 streaming has many merits, it cannot completely replace the former way of entertainment. It is because
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 cannot have full experiences just by
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 small screen of
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 or tablet. While
audiences
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 at the
theatre
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 can see all the sides of the stage,
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 of all performers, ones at home can just see some parts which were recorded by cameras. And for movie watchers, just in movie
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 they are served with high solution big screens and lively sound effects.
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, sometimes it is boring to watch something alone. In that
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 you can share the joy with others who have the same interest at the stage. In conclusion, streaming
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 will continue to develop but the stages still have not lost their charm. Both will survive in the future.
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