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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is always debatable whether visitors should follow local
customs
 and
behaviour
 or whether the
country
 should be accustomed to cultural
differences
.
First
, I would like to discuss the following local
customs
 and
behaviour
. As human beings, we have consciousness which helps us to decide what is right or wrong that we apply in every sphere of our life. But everybody may not apply consciousness or may not have the same level of consciousness to apply. If one does not follow local
customs
, he/she may not be taken warmly by the
people
 of that
country
. Due to
this
 reason, I believe that everybody who visits other
countries
 should follow local
customs
 and
behaviour
.
Besides
this
, local
customs
 and
behaviour
 are mostly regulated by the religion of the
country
 which is very sensitive to most
people
.
That is
 why I agree with the view of following local
customs
 and
behaviour
.
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 the other hand, there are many reasons to agree with the
second
 view that the host
country
 should welcome cultural
differences
. It is universally true that civilisation is evolving since the beginning of mankind and the main reason behind
this
 is that
people
 are travelling from one place to another to explore the world which brings new cultures to new places. If one fails to welcome cultural
differences
, he/she will not be able to cope with the cultures of other
countries
.
This
 will impact the economy in terms of tourism and modernization as well as the evaluation of civilisation. A good example of welcoming cultural
differences
 in
Malaysia
.
People
 from western
countries
 are travelling to
Malaysia
 and most of them are not used to following local
customs
 being a Muslim
country
,
Malaysia
also
 provides freedom to visitors until laws are broken.
Malaysia
 has become an example for other
countries
 to welcome cultural
differences
.
That is
 why cultural
differences
 should always be welcomed until it hurts your philosophy or religion.
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