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The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries. Do the advantages of this development overweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,the world became an easy place for international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass
media
 ,which made it more possible than ever for
people
 to know how other
people
 live in other countries.I shall discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 development in the coming paragraphs.
First
 and foremost,our society became a small village ,
people
 connect with each other easier and with
flexibility
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more flexibility
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 than before.
For instance
, you can call a friend or text him for free without any effort ,either through social
media
 platforms or regular phone calls.
Secondly
,social
media
platformsplatforms
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platforms platforms
 reformed access to cultural traditions and knowing the lifestyle of all communities everywhere.
On the other hand
 , travelling to the far-east
for example
 is much easier, especially nowadays due to cheap tickets,economical airlines and airports in each main or even average city.
On the contrary
,there are some disadvantages to
this
 modern technology. Actually,it made
people
 live a virtual life not knowing anything about their family members in the same house.
Besides
,communities lost the strong bonding they use to have before the invention of aeroplanes and mass
media
.
Last
 but not least,individuals are now more introverted than any time before and less likely to connect with others and be social ,
this
 is due to the dependency on social
media
 and travelling once in a while. In a nutshell, the spread of social
media
 and international travel has its advantages and disadvantages like everything else,but the most prominent thing is to reach the level of awareness on when and how to exploit
this
 kind of technology and get the best out of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural preservation
  • sustainability
  • mass media
  • cosmopolitanism
  • global village
  • tourism industry
  • cultural assimilation
  • cultural erosion
  • carbon footprint
  • ethnocentrism
  • cultural sensitivity
  • exchange programs
  • cultural heritage
  • xenophobia
  • cultural diversity
  • cultural awareness
  • exploitation
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