Some people argue that globalisation has been a great benefit to people around the world, while others believe that it is the cause of many of the problems we see today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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opinion
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homeworking is very good, because many
people
are able to work from
home
, so they do not need to go somewhere far.
Also
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you do not
lost
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the way
for
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to
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the office or classroom,
you
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and you
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do not need to find the person
what
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you need, because he is over there, in an online conference and for some
people
who find it hard
in
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to
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communicate
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in
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live, online work will become a comfortable place. I think
works
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at
home
do not have
a problems
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a problem
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, only if communication disappears in
live
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.
People
, who study at
home
have more problems
,
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because
teacher
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the teacher
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can explain the lesson not understandable or because
of
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lazy
people
just will only pretend that they doing something. Some
people
do not even hide it.
Also
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communication
is disappear
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, so
person
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a person
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may not get to know anyone, just like the rest. But
the
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other hand, homeworking
very
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is very
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benefit
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for
people
.
People
do not need to go somewhere
in
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by
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car
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the car
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, so the air may become cleanlier than now.
Also
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people
do not
came
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home
very late, because after work they will continue to stay at
home
and even some
people
will be able to sleep
,
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because they will go to bed earlier. So yeah, it will be
benefit
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not only for
people
,
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but
also
for the world around us. In the
end
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I can say that our advances in technological communication help
for
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people
and for nature. Of course, even here there will be disadvantages, but there are not so many of them and they depend on the person himself.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • economic growth
  • technological advancement
  • rapid spread
  • intercultural understanding
  • collaboration
  • exploitation
  • environmental degradation
  • erosion
  • inequality
  • cultural identity
  • global consumer culture
  • equitable
  • sustainable development
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