COMMUNITIES AND HELPING EACH OTHER We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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