COMMUNITIES AND HELPING EACH OTHER We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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situation and

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that needs help and is more difficult when we want to help everyone in the world, but I think is good to do good things for

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with others, we don’t know How the other

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is passing your life, we don’t know his/ her feelings because each

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better

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than them. Well in

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