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COMMUNITIES AND HELPING EACH OTHER We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#communities #world #countries
Well
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 I am going to talk about communities and helping each other, I am going to give my opinion,
also
 I am going to share my experiences with
this
 situation and
also
 I think, well
also
 I want to give some advice. Well I am going to start, so yes I think that we can not help
every one
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 that needs help and is more difficult when we want to help everyone in the world, but I think is good to do good things for
the
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other
people
atthough
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although
though
 is not For
to
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 much
people
 or
ocations
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locations
 I think we must to be caritative, emphatical
persons
 with our friends, family not always
people
 that we meet so that have a
lot
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persons
 that we need our help, I think not always
are consider
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 with others, we don’t know How the other
people
 is passing your life, we don’t know his/ her feelings because each
people
 are different is for that reason we need to be a good person not always giving money I think only it can be just sharing our advice or maybe just listening to other
people
 In my
opinion
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 not always it is the big thing we share with
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others usually or more times the small things are better than big things, the small thing
are
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 always made with love and is more
appreciate
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. I think in my personal opinion, I know that sometimes we are a little or a
lot
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 bad
persons
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people
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 when we didn’t want to help
a
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others
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people
 just because we have
a bad experiences
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 with them but we must remember that we are
a
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better
persons
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 than them. Well in
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
 I want to say that always that we can
helps
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 other
people
 or our friends or family, just made because we don’t know when we are
that
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people
 that we need help
.
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with.
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