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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
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 can’t live without computers and mobile phones, they are the most important technology we use in our daily life. We need them to communicate,
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do research, and
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work. We gather knowledge easier
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 searching on the internet than
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 reading books word by word, we talk to each other simultaneously but not waiting for letters for a long time. It is undeniable to say that,
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 a lot of
people
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 who are against the technologies, they believe that those technologies will
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 bring harm to humans. Especially when parents are not allowing children to use their gadgets. I’ve watched some videos online,
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 do the interview and collect the
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data
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. The conclusion is that
people
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 who are always watching short videos,
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 sentences just like how we talk in chat will not focus on everything after that. Because they are used to dealing with short and fun information, they don’t have the patience to accept a long introduction and
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 letter. But I still believe these developed technology’s advantages are more than the disadvantages. Time wastage was the biggest problem before the
cell-phone
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 was invented. Time is
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gold, we can solve many problems just simply by communication, but it was a luxury
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people
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 in the past to communicate with each other. The shortages we can avoid
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 reading long articles but we can’t without computers and
cell-phones
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cell phones
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 to communicate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • comprehension skills
  • digital content
  • sustained reading capabilities
  • texting and messaging apps
  • abbreviations
  • acronyms
  • emojis
  • formally and coherently
  • educational resources
  • scholarly articles
  • educational apps
  • enhance
  • digital platforms
  • blogs
  • social media posts
  • online forums
  • concise
  • impactful writing
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